IELTS Writing Task 2 - Model Answer

Some people believe that lowering the speed limit is the best way to improve road safety. Others think that there are other ways to make roads safer. Discuss these two options and give your opinion.


Statistics indicate that the number of road-traffic accidents is climbing steadily year on year and that, tragically, schoolchildren are at the greatest risk. This situation has prompted some experts in road safety to propose reducing the speed limit, whilst others put forward alternative strategies. This essay will examine both approaches.


Making it illegal to drive above a certain speed could undoubtedly lead to a reduction in fatalities. Accidents would be less serious and more drivers, passengers, other road-users and pedestrians would survive them. There would be the added bonus of a drop in carbon emissions and motorists would require less fuel. However, such a measure would frustrate those behind the wheel of a car by making journey times longer and potentially increasing the likelihood of traffic jams and congestion.


Governments have the power to introduce other life-saving policies. For instance, the wearing of seat-belts could be made compulsory. Car-users might be forced to re-take their driving test on an annual basis, road surfaces ought to be improved and advertising campaigns which raise awareness of the perils of driving could be launched. Doing this would certainly be cost-effective in the long-run and would probably enjoy public approval. It needs to be admitted that these policies require a level of hard-work and commitment which some of our political leaders lack.


Having considered the matter in some depth, I cannot see why a wide range of measures should not be brought in. If policy-makers outlawed excessively high speeds and

introduced other strategies mentioned above, our streets would be less dangerous and far fewer lives would be destroyed needlessly. I genuinely hope those in power will take steps to ensure that nobody dies unnecessarily as a result of a car crash.


EXAMINER COMMENTS:


1. This is a DISCUSSION essay. Candidates need to write about two different possibilities. Usually, candidates write about the advantages of both possibilities. In this essay, a disadvantage or problem connected with each possibility has been included. This is a strength.


2. The INTRODUCTION explains the current situation. This shows that the issue is an important one. It also allows the writer to re-phrase the question. There is a THESIS STATEMENT which does not give the writer’s opinion. This would generally be a bad idea in an OPINION essay but in a DISCUSSION essay (even a DISCUSSION essay which asks for the writer’s opinion) it is fine to leave the opinion until the end, especially when the opinion is that both options are good.


3. Paragraph 2 discusses the first option in depth. Paragraph 3 discusses the second option in depth.


4. The CONCLUSION gives the writer’s opinion that both options make sense. This opinion is explained. Finally, the writer expresses a hope for the future.


5. Complex VOCABULARY has been highlighted in bold.


6. Complex GRAMMAR has been underlined.

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